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This reads as a pretty good presentation to a potential agent or publisher. You begin with market size, go on to explain how you meet the needs of that market, and include additional sales points. Your examples and details add to the authenticity and give evidence of your writing skills. Your mechanics (grammar, punctuation, usage) are very strong, which counts for much. I'm not an expert, but this looks very good to me.
On a more personal note, my background and my step-daughter's genetics lead me to think that I might be deciding whether to raise one or more grandchild eventually. While I am not precisely in your target market today, there must be many others like me who know we have the potential to be in your situation and need to learn more before making the difficult decisions about whether and how to raise grandchildren.